NCunt: Black Cocks Only

[Dehbashi]

Well don't write your book that way.

[MegaNigger]

Been lurking this thread for a couple days;



People like Lindsey incentivize me to go over my own writing again before me and my buddy get too far with our comic. I've tried to keep our character dialog as "natural" as possible. I don't think too hard about it trying to insert shit. I act as if they are sincere conversations. The tough part in comic panels though is condensing huge info dumps to allow the panels to show instead of tell. I get that books need descriptive dialog, but Lindsey just goes on and on describing shit that the reader's brain should fill in for itself.

[Poonoo]

Kek

This coming from a critic who can only contextualize Disney movies through da patriarchy. And no one believes you. You are textbook daddy issues chick.

The fact she feels the need to respond to this so publicly shows it's bothering her. She was definitely lurking here during the 1.0 days and probably still does, on the TGWTG SA thread back in 2011-ish she admitted to masochistically reading hate comments.

Later that night, Cora hears her mom drunk and crying in the other room. A common sound in Taj Ma Ellis, I'm sure. Cora knows she should comfort mom, but doesn't. She catches herself in the mirror and notices the weight gain, and circles under her eyes, confirming what DHI already knew, Cora is Lindsay. And BTW despite all that strong indie woman crap, what's Lindsay's Mary Sue concerned with? How pretty she looks. She notes make up will cover up those imperfections, just like Lindsay IRL.

You are only three chapters in and it already proves the "youtube thinkerboys" are right. "Mommy's a drunk, daddy's not around and I'm getting old and fat" I actually thought with an editor and publisher she would have this shit cut out, but then I remembered how fucking woke all media is and how they would never questiona woman.



Look, it's Lindsay.

Interesting? No. It's not. Nothing has happened in a chapter and a half. We are stuck in this damn kitchen!

Ironic that an empowered woman writes a book about being in a kitchen for way too damn long.

[pibbs]

Axiom's End by HotDog Girl
Chapter 4: A New Dope
DHI Book Club Discussion by pibbs
protected by Fair Use, bitch

This chapter opens with Cora tossing and turning for hours, emo-thinking about daddeh. (And I just posted a tweet where Lindsay called bullshit on men saying her character has daddy issues. Ok, then) BTW Cora calls her dad by his first name, Nils, but that don't mean nothing.

The scuffling in the computer room didn’t wake her up; she’d been awake for hours. She’d been trying to clear her mind and get to sleep but always came back to Nils’s letter, how it ripped open wounds she’d deluded herself into thinking had healed years ago. She didn’t know why she had kept it for the last two months; it was too uncomfortable to merit introspection. She wondered what he wanted, what he really, honestly expected her to do.

Nope. No daddy issues here.

Anyway. Something's fucking about in the kitchen. Gee, what could it be? A rat, a bat, a long-haired cat?

Or an alien.

Oh.
Again, nothing but a conspiracy nut on the internet (her dad) has suggested there's an alien on Earth. Even so why would Cora think in a city of 4 million an alien wandered into her house? Not since Abrams' Kirk finding old Spock in the cave has such plot convenience been so blatant.
Though it's probably because Lindsay is so insecure in her writing she tries to acknowledge that she's aware of the same familiar tropes that's obvious to the reader. But skipping over the process she makes the mistake that these things should'nt be obvious to the character, because it wasn't earned in the narrative. But I ask, if she's worried about recycling those tropes, then WHY USE THEM?!

“Felix,” she whispered, hoping to God he was the culprit. “Felix? You know you’re not supposed to be in there, you little pervert.”

Felix, her kid brother. Pervert? That's pretty judgmental coming from an empowered aborter, Lin-lin.

The computer is on, but dismantled. Oh, I'm hoping this thing looks exactly like ET (since this could be a scene from that movie) and Lins is just fucking with us.

For the space of a heartbeat, she thought she saw a dark silhouette on the other side of the living room, distinctly inhuman, a massive reptoid thing in a crouch. She definitely saw eyes, black orbs imbued with the faintest of golden glows.

Damn.
So, what does our strong independent female protagonist, written by a strong-independent woman, do?

She goes screaming down the hall.

She cowers in her mom's room with the two kids and the pug named Monster Truck. Thor is left out in the hall. Fuck that dog.

She turned and looked at the one small window in the room, wondering if there was a glimmer of hope of getting all four of them and the dog out through the window before that thing broke down the door, when she felt a high-frequency noise ringing inside her head. She tried to say something but fell to her knees. She sensed the dog stop barking, her sister stop crying. The noise was telling her to close her eyes, go to sleep.

End chapter.
Thank God, this was a short chapter.

[pibbs]

I'm enjoying this. If you guys aren't let me know and I'll fuck off to my own thread.

There's 40 chapters BTW. And I will do them all.

[Dehbashi]

I am fine with it. It involves her ass anyway and we can laugh at how shitty it is.

[da PAC Nigguh]

Yeah keep going. It's not like there's fuck anything else regarding this bitch that's worth discussing.

[Kugelfisch]

True. She'll likely talk about nothing else the next few months as well so you might as well go through it.

[Cuckara]

I'm enjoying this. If you guys aren't let me know and I'll fuck off to my own thread.

There's 40 chapters BTW. And I will do them all.

This is great; far better than any discussion that has happened in this thread. Keep it up. However, it might be a wise to move everything to another thread so that it will be easier for people to consecutively read your posts. And if one of the mods pinned your thread to the front page of the Internet Nobodies board, then your take down of her garbage might reach a wider audience. I'm mentioning this because it's amusing to imagine Lindsay and her fans having a breakdown over your posts.

[RAPEMAN]

"Hello you, I'm DHI's last surviving British person..."

Ten year time skip:

"Hello you, I'm the world's last surviving British person..."