Re: Kassandra Killjoy: Paranormal Private-Eye "The Search for the Swordsman" - A short story cosplaying as a novel by pe
Posted: Sun Feb 25, 2024 11:19 pm
So, yeah, this book is awful in every way. I won't repeat myself, as pee has demonstrated he has no ability to write good fiction. I'll just hIt some highlights.
This chapter is filled with bad jokes, cliche phrases, and references that reflect peeRod's age and not of his target audience. Read them for yourself.
This chapter ends with a fight scene that I'm sure plays epically in peeRod's head, with great special FX, and swelling orchestral music, or rock music. But on paper is cringe, silly, and cliche. It would be a little better if peeRod actually described things better. Or wrote better dialog. Or just killed himself before writing this utter shit.,
Anyway. As predicted (by one of us, forget who) Mad is the new Swordsman.
Also, becoming the Swordsman isn't the threshold, retard. The threshold was wayyyy back when Killjoy got her involved in the adventure. Your ignorance is outstanding. Let me guess, you heard about the hero's journey in a YouTube video somewhere (probably Lindsay's, and only partially listened while masturbating), but didn't bother to actually go study it (or any story writing basics)before writing this shit.
Case in point...
Examples of his lack of writing skill. Look at this shit.
One last thing...
BTW His usual responses to these are "small peepee man." Just saw him in a tweet the other day defending "The Marvels" and he said this exact phrase.
No editorial in the narrative unless it's first person, you hack.Ironically, its owner, the beloved billionaire Light Preston, is the most deserving of being housed in such a facility
Yeah, we know. Why are you recapping? This book isn't that long.he is better known in the underworld as Loopin Shadows
This chapter is filled with bad jokes, cliche phrases, and references that reflect peeRod's age and not of his target audience. Read them for yourself.
This chapter ends with a fight scene that I'm sure plays epically in peeRod's head, with great special FX, and swelling orchestral music, or rock music. But on paper is cringe, silly, and cliche. It would be a little better if peeRod actually described things better. Or wrote better dialog. Or just killed himself before writing this utter shit.,
Oh, fuck you, peeRod. I bet you can't even name the stages of the hero's journey circle, because it's certainly not demonstrated here. It's only by pure accident that there's any structure whatsoever, as you copy the ton of capeshit media you have consumed, so you loosely know how a story is supposed to go. However, you do nothing creative, nor original nor interesting with the genre. This is a chinese knock-off of an already shitty brand of storytelling. Fuck you.Mad, this is not my hero's journey. It's yours."
Anyway. As predicted (by one of us, forget who) Mad is the new Swordsman.
FUCK YOU, FUCK YOU, AND FUCK YOU! The threshold is supposed to happen AT THE BEGINNING OF THE FUCKING STORY NOT IN THE LAST CHAPTER, YOU DUMB SHIT!"You're fresh out of excuses, Mad. Will you accept the calling, cross the threshold, and conclude your Hero's Journey?
Also, becoming the Swordsman isn't the threshold, retard. The threshold was wayyyy back when Killjoy got her involved in the adventure. Your ignorance is outstanding. Let me guess, you heard about the hero's journey in a YouTube video somewhere (probably Lindsay's, and only partially listened while masturbating), but didn't bother to actually go study it (or any story writing basics)before writing this shit.
Case in point...
Don't tell us it was heroic. Describe it. Set it up. Let the reader feel the heroism. peeBrain, you are a terrible writer.Killjoy and Mad heroically emerge from the smoke.
THAT'S NOT OLD ENGLISH YOU STUPID CUNT. IT'S EARLY MODERN ENGLISH DO YOUR FUCKING RESEARCH, YOU LAZY GOBLIN!"Very well, then. What is thy command?" he says, begrudgingly.
"First of all, what's with the old English?
Examples of his lack of writing skill. Look at this shit.
peeRod doesn't even know basic combing of sentences or phrases to be more readable.Minerva's eyes widen as she watches Mad take the sword like a baseball bat and swat at the plasma bolt. Mad knocks the bolt in the opposite direction.
Minerva watches in horror as the bolt flies past her and towards Shadows.
A white plasma bolt hits the wall behind him, completely missing him.
He turns to see Mad holding the Heavenly Blade like a rifle
"You want our blood? Then come and get it, douche bag!" Mad invites.
Killjoy is impressed by her bravado. "'Damn, Mad badass!"
I'm done. Voice...A stray plasma bolt knocks Shadow's silver mask away, revealing that he isn't hiding scars, but half of his face is permanently stuck in human form,
Mad's jaw drops at the horrific sight. So the part of your face you keep hidden is the part that looks like Jon Hamm?"
"Now that's a twist M. Night Shyamalan wouldn't see coming!" Killjoy quips.
One last thing...
Pretty sure this is peeRod's attempt at being meta, as the common complaint about modern woke movies is that a 90lb female protagonist can somehow beat up a full-grown man. peeRod once again demonstrates he is functionally retarded and doesn't understand the argument.Not to mention the humiliation of getting knocked out by a ninety-pound girl."
BTW His usual responses to these are "small peepee man." Just saw him in a tweet the other day defending "The Marvels" and he said this exact phrase.